CTS Entry: Foamy/Spongy
Posted by Angela Ackerman
Waves hitting the shore
Spittle bugs (foam on plants)
Fresh cows milk
White caps or breakers
Scum on ponds
Fish egg clusters
Betta fish bubble nests
Bubbles trapped in water
Seed pod fluff (trees, plants)
Forest floor (undergrowth)
Fruit pith (oranges, pomegranates)
Root bear foam
Hot tub bubbles
Fake spray snow for windows
Foam finger wavers at sporting events
Memory foam mattresses
Dried apple slices
Foamy: frothy, sudsy, bubbly, lather, yeasty, whipped, spume
Spongy: springy, peaty, porous, airy, fluffy, cushioned
Describing texture in a story creates intimacy between reader and character, and can even cause an emotional trigger for both. To anchor the reader in the scene, make sure comparisons and contrasts are clear and relatable, and within the scope of the narrator's life knowledge and experience.
A weak example:
Off the trail I lay back on the thick, springy moss to look up at the tree tops, squirming to find a spot where a tree root isn't poking through nature's mattress.
What's wrong with this example?
There's conflicting detail happening here--the moss is described as thick and springy suggesting comfort, then the image is ruined by tree roots poking through the undergrowth. If the moss was truly thick as suggested, roots would not be felt to the extent that it would be discomforting.
A strong example:
I find a spot off the main trail and lay back on the thick, springy moss to look up at the tree tops. Even the well established cedar roots cannot breach nature's mattress.
Why does this example work?
The details here support one another--the roots are there, but are not bothersome due to the thickness of the moss.