Shape Entry: Circular/Sphere

Natural:
Pupils
Animal eyes/fish eyes
Mushroom caps
Poplar leaves
Peppercorns
The "eye" of a flower
Peas
Butterfly markings
Ladybug spots
River pebbles
Pearls
Fish eggs
Frog eggs
Planets
Moons
Spots on a faun/leopard
Oranges
Grapes
Blueberries
Gooseberries
Cranberries
Dew drops on a leaf, beads of moisture
The sun
Craters
Rain drops on the sidewalk
Spider's egg sacks
Beads of sweat
Lentils
Ripples on water from a dropped pebble
Dandelion seed head
Seedless watermelon, cantaloupe, honeydew melon
Air bubbles

Man-made:

Saucers
Plates
Polka dots
Beads
Jewels
Basketball, baseballs, golf balls, tennis ball, ping pong etc.
Coins
Metal nuts
Poker chips
Bingo chips
Game pieces
Eyeglass lenses
Headlights
Frisbees
Hula hoops
Tires
Steering wheels
Snow balls
M&M's or Smarties
Jawbreakers
Peppermints
Cd's
Zeros and the letter 'O'
Jelly roll
Fishbowl
Geode
Sushi
Pie
Manhole covers
Traffic circles
Traffic lights
Marbles
Portholes
World globes
Snow globe
Compass
Water bottle lids
Crop circles
Tapioca
Cut logs
Pepperoni/salami slice

Synonyms:

Sphere, globe, circular, ring, round, loop, halo, band, loop, orb, orbital, ball, pellet, disc

Describing a shape is best done in as few words as possible. Think of the shape as a camera snap shot--you want to capture the gist of what you mean as soon as possible so you can get on with other related (and more important) detail, and the action happening in the scene

A weak example:

The zit on his chin was as greasy and round as a slice of salami.

What's wrong with this example?

This description's pretty good nasty-wise, but the size of the comparison is all off. We get the image of a massive zit so comical that it might spoil the description unless humor is intended.

A strong example:

The last thing I expected at the wake was to see my estranged cousin Sarah working the crowd, playing the part of the heartbroken granddaughter. When I noticed the twin jade globes dangling from her ears, catching the light, my hand twitched with the urge to slap her. Not only had she found Nana's spare key, she'd gotten into her antique jewelry collection as well.

Why does this work?

This works because the shape and size is accurate enough to give the reader an image, but doesn't detract from the emotion tension of the scene.

4 comments:

Windsong said...

Thanks for not only giving the examples, but for also showing the reasoning behind what works and what doesn't. :)

Bish Denham said...

Round. Who doesn't love round? As in...love makes the world go round.

PJ Hoover said...

Spheres are perfect! Love this!

colbymarshall said...

the greasy and round like a slice of salami kind of made me want to cry a little, lol

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